This week I have been using a range of language features to help make my writing more descriptive. Some language features we have been talking about are similes, metaphors, personification and onomatopoeia.
These are my favourite sentences from my writing this week is
When I was on the field my hurt was pounding really fast when I was going to kicked the ball and then I kicked the ball as hard as I could kick and it went speeding to the goal like a bullet train and then ....... I Got it in and then the crowd went wild like a bull that have been released out of it cage.
Hi Bob.
ReplyDeleteI like how you have used similes to add detail to your writing. I have a suggestion for your first two sentences. You could change the end of your first sentence by writing 'as I moved closer to the ball.' after the word fast. Your next sentence would start with 'I kicked the ball as hard as I could..
From Miss Fortes